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Vinsanity has taken over in New Jersey
In Boston, The Truth is told
In the Twin Cities, The Kid has become The Man
The Answer can be found in Philly
The Great Wall resides in Houston
As does the T-Mac Attack
And Shaq dominates in Miami
With his sidekick, Flash, being the silent assassin
The King reigns in Cleveland, with many advisors
This is the world of NBA Superstars…
The nicknames tell the story.
It’s The Truth…
In a Flash you’ll know The Answer…
Just ask the King…
Vinsanity has taken over his country…
my nba poem
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by Scotty on Wed Oct 26, 2005 4:21 pm
yeah i was trying to get it to rhyme too!I forgot that some poems dont ryhme when I was reading this
I was like shit man, this fucking shit dont even ryhme a damn bit, what the fuck
But then I realized
Go Nuggets!
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by shadowgrin on Wed Oct 26, 2005 11:31 pm
I write this haiku.
Your poem not good at all.
You are mad? Fuck off!
Why did I say your poem is bad? As others have said:
Some poems do not rhyme but they have a definite flow or structure. One element must exist if the other is absent or both elements must be present for it to be considered as a poem.
Your "poem" neither has both. Just because it's written like a poem doesn't mean it's a poem. I think your work is a prose, IMO.
Your poem not good at all.
You are mad? Fuck off!
Why did I say your poem is bad? As others have said:
some poems dont ryhme
no flow to the poem
you should work on the metrics a little bit
Some poems do not rhyme but they have a definite flow or structure. One element must exist if the other is absent or both elements must be present for it to be considered as a poem.
Your "poem" neither has both. Just because it's written like a poem doesn't mean it's a poem. I think your work is a prose, IMO.
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by cyanide on Wed Oct 26, 2005 11:34 pm
So you actually registered this so-called "poem" under copyright laws?
if you were killed tomorrow, i WOULDNT GO 2 UR FUNERAL CUZ ID B N JAIL 4 KILLIN THE MOTHA FUCKER THAT KILLED U!
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