my nba poem
Wed Oct 26, 2005 9:55 am
DISCLAIMER: I HAVE COPYRIGHT LAWS TO THIS< IF SOMEONE STEALS THIS I WILL SUE
Vinsanity has taken over in New Jersey
In Boston, The Truth is told
In the Twin Cities, The Kid has become The Man
The Answer can be found in Philly
The Great Wall resides in Houston
As does the T-Mac Attack
And Shaq dominates in Miami
With his sidekick, Flash, being the silent assassin
The King reigns in Cleveland, with many advisors
This is the world of NBA Superstars…
The nicknames tell the story.
It’s The Truth…
In a Flash you’ll know The Answer…
Just ask the King…
Vinsanity has taken over his country…
Vinsanity has taken over in New Jersey
In Boston, The Truth is told
In the Twin Cities, The Kid has become The Man
The Answer can be found in Philly
The Great Wall resides in Houston
As does the T-Mac Attack
And Shaq dominates in Miami
With his sidekick, Flash, being the silent assassin
The King reigns in Cleveland, with many advisors
This is the world of NBA Superstars…
The nicknames tell the story.
It’s The Truth…
In a Flash you’ll know The Answer…
Just ask the King…
Vinsanity has taken over his country…
Wed Oct 26, 2005 9:58 am
Somehow, I don't think there's much danger of anyone stealing that.
Wed Oct 26, 2005 10:06 am
Good effort man, you should work on the metrics a little bit... 
Wed Oct 26, 2005 11:21 am
I forgot that some poems dont ryhme when I was reading this
I was like shit man, this fucking shit dont even ryhme a damn bit, what the fuck
But then I realized
I was like shit man, this fucking shit dont even ryhme a damn bit, what the fuck
But then I realized
Wed Oct 26, 2005 4:21 pm
yeah i was trying to get it to rhyme too!I forgot that some poems dont ryhme when I was reading this
I was like shit man, this fucking shit dont even ryhme a damn bit, what the fuck
But then I realized
Wed Oct 26, 2005 4:56 pm
there's no flow to the poem, but not too bad
Wed Oct 26, 2005 5:18 pm
Good stuff kid... Nice try 
Wed Oct 26, 2005 5:31 pm
Where is Ron Mercer in your poem! 
Wed Oct 26, 2005 11:31 pm
I write this haiku.
Your poem not good at all.
You are mad? Fuck off!
Why did I say your poem is bad? As others have said:
Some poems do not rhyme but they have a definite flow or structure. One element must exist if the other is absent or both elements must be present for it to be considered as a poem.
Your "poem" neither has both. Just because it's written like a poem doesn't mean it's a poem. I think your work is a prose, IMO.
Your poem not good at all.
You are mad? Fuck off!
Why did I say your poem is bad? As others have said:
some poems dont ryhme
no flow to the poem
you should work on the metrics a little bit
Some poems do not rhyme but they have a definite flow or structure. One element must exist if the other is absent or both elements must be present for it to be considered as a poem.
Your "poem" neither has both. Just because it's written like a poem doesn't mean it's a poem. I think your work is a prose, IMO.
Wed Oct 26, 2005 11:34 pm
So you actually registered this so-called "poem" under copyright laws?
Thu Oct 27, 2005 6:14 am
no not really
Thu Oct 27, 2005 6:18 am
So I can say I wrote it and get millions for it?
Thu Oct 27, 2005 6:41 am
It doesn't have a real flow like a poem normally should. Just a bunch of metaphoric phrases and stuff slapped together.
Thu Oct 27, 2005 9:11 am
Riot wrote:So I can say I wrote it and get millions for it?
Millions in monopoly money
Fri Oct 28, 2005 2:05 pm
thiz iz some real shit, man! yo, take it to an editor, bro! some niggaz iz very pleazed to hear this shit!