First Half of the NBA Season: Sixers

[nbalive744]

First Half of the NBA Season: Sixers

Well it’s been 1 half of the Philadelphia 76ers 05-06 NBA Season, and things could be better. At the seasons start, the Sixers were struggling big-time. Kicking off the Season with a 3 game losing streak, including disheartening loses to the Bucks, Pistons, and Bobcats. The Sixers were being booed on their own Home Court, and the future wasn’t looking good. Then the Sixers started winning again, in fact ; they went on a 6 game winning streak, including wins over the Pacers and Mavericks. In my opinion, this had been the best the Sixers had been playing in the current season as of late. One of the best performers of the win streak, was Andre Iguodala, scorching the Raptors for 26 points, a career-high, which makes me think back to the 2004 NBA Draft, in which the Raptors had the 8th pick, with Andre Iguodala on the Draft Board, the Raptors took Rafael Arujo, a huge disappointment, doing nothing special in his NBA career to-date. Moving along the Season, the Sixers became a terrible defensive team, giving up around 98 Points Per Game, but the bright side was that they were the second best scoring team, averaging about 102 Points Per Game.

So now what? The Sixers are about 2 games above the .500 Win-Loss Mark; heading into a Season long 7 game road trip. The trip was somewhat disappointing, to say the least. They went for 2 wins, and 5 losses on the trip. The only 2 wins were against the Denver Nuggets, backed up by an Allen Iverson game-winning jumper, and the other win against the Sacramento Kings. But after the trip, the Sixers would play 7 of their 9 next games at Home. They played normal in their 9 games, maintaining their record at the .500 mark. Then came a very surprising game again the Boston Celtics, the Sixers were down by as many as 16, then they came back in the Fourth Quarter to send it to Overtime; The game would go to Triple OT, including a buzzer-beating 3 pointer at the end of the Second OT. The Sixers won the game 125-124 backed up by good team play. I think this game was quite sloppy, featuring many Turnovers by both teams. A quote from Sixers Head Coach Maurice Cheeks after the game: “This win against the Celtics, was a season changing game [In a good way]”. Well it wasn’t, the Sixers went on a 2 game losing streak, although they played so bad it seemed like more than 2 losses. The good news was that the Sixers would go on to win their next 4 out of 6 games, but at a huge cost: The loss of Allen Iverson to an ankle injury from stepping on the foot of Dwight Howard. So now as the season moves along to a second half, I expect much better team play from the Sixers, rater than having the offense run through Allen Iverson, also, the defense must dramatically improve for the Philadelphia 76ers to make it past the 1st round of the Playoffs, so my prediction for the Philadelphia 76ers Final Record is: 44-38.

Just a quick article I wrote for my school paper, hopefully it makes it in.

[Jugs]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

[dada]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

Why so agressive?

[Num33Baller]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

ima laugh if they do.

[nbalive744]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

I bet you they'll finish with a better record than the Blazers and Jazz.

[Gator]

.......Blazers will still make the playoffs..

[Colin]

I don't think they'll finish the year like that, but on the article (since you did write it for the school paper): stay away from using 'in my opinion' in any formal writing. You're writing it so it's obviously your opinion. You also capitalize a lot of things you aren't supposed to ('Turnovers', 'Head Coach', 'Fourth Quarter', etc.) And you have some run-on sentences in there.

But back to the subject. They're not finishing the year like that. Granted I haven't studied their schedule, but I sure don't "expect much better team play from the Sixers, rater than having the offense run through Allen Iverson" (whatever that means.)

[Cable]

I don't feel like correcting all the mistakes in that, do it if you want Cy

[Drex]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

Yes they will, bitch I hope so
Now go back to suck Pryzbylla's cock jp

[BOSS]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

Why so agressive?

cause thats how he rolls.

[ixcuincle]

One of the best performers of the win streak, was Andre Iguodala, scorching the Raptors for 26 points, a career-high, which makes me think back to the 2004 NBA Draft, in which the Raptors had the 8th pick, with Andre Iguodala on the Draft Board, the Raptors took Rafael Arujo, a huge disappointment, doing nothing special in his NBA career to-date.

run on sentence...not to go "newspaper editor" on you but in the future try to reduce all these clauses and seperate them. There are too many commas and appositives in one sentence which is confusing to the reader. Otherwise the article is decent but can be improved. The vocabulary , information , and language is good at times but is marred by poor punctuation.

Here is a fairly better revision of that segment of the article.

One of the best performers of the win streak was Andre Iguodala, scorching the Raptors for 26 points, a career-high. This makes me think back to the 2004 NBA Draft, where the Raptors had the 8th pick. With Andre Iguodala on the draft board, the Raptors took Rafael Arujo, a huge disappointment, doing nothing special in his NBA career to-date.

[Jugs]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

I bet you they'll finish with a better record than the Blazers and Jazz.

My Jazz are doing very well thank you, Blazers are doing better than the Bobcats

[Blasphemy]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

Yes they will, bitch I hope so
Now go back to suck Pryzbylla's cock jp

Sixers will make the playoffs. But will get 8t hseed and will loose to the pistons

[Emiliano]

76ers will not finish with a 44-38 record you homer bitch

Why so agressive?

It's a Jugs thing.

[Keo]

We're only a game or two behind New Jersey, we still have a shot at the Atlantic and third place in the East if we can start to get into a consistant winning formula instead flirting with the .500 mark.

[Axel]

Why are we correcting the article? He already sent it in, so there is no way he can correct it now.

I assume he posted it here for us to read the content of the article... not dissect the grammatical errors.

[Drex]

We are correcting the guy because that might help him the next time he has to write something.

[nbalive744]

Hey guys, good news, the teacher pulled me out of class today and told me that the article was amazing .

I have to re-type it at school this Thursday, so I will edit the article to your suggestions . ixcuincle, I have used your suggestion, thanks.

[Blasphemy]

Oh cool its going in the newspaper!!!![maybe]

But its an alright article youll get better!